more and more people are choosing to eat healthy food and exercise regularly. Why? What can we do to encourage this?

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There is debate over why
people
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starting to eat healthy food, make it so popular, and enhance the aesthetic of sports and
healthy
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a healthy
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lifestyle. Nowadays more than ninety
percent
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of
people
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use
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apply
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social networks, where they always can see many videos where individuals describe
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their day, what they
to
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do, and in
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video content makers add recipes
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healthy food and how they
went
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to
gym
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the gym
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, and after
show
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their strong, attractive and slender body,
human
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a human
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who
watch
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this
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video start to like
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kind of life and try to strive for a similar way of living.
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people
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to be healthy can start from school where children should be explained the dangers of obesity and how to avoid it.
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Also
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talk about diets and the fact that children should reduce their consumption of junk foods.
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addition
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addition,
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gym
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also
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can add
promotion
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or make a discount for
people
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who invite their friends or relatives to go to the gym to do sports. In
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i
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can say that social networks play
crucial
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a crucial
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role for to spread and
increase
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people
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's interest in sports and the desire to strive for an aesthetic life, which is broadcast by social networks.

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Ensure that your introduction clearly outlines the main points you will discuss. A clearer thesis statement will help guide your reader.
coherence and cohesion
Use more linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. For example, use 'Additionally', 'Moreover', and 'Furthermore' to enhance coherence.
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Try to include more specific examples to support your points. For instance, you could mention specific social media platforms or campaigns that promote healthy living.
task achievement
You have identified a relevant issue regarding health and fitness trends influenced by social media, which is a timely and relatable topic.
coherence and cohesion
Your conclusion effectively summarizes your main thoughts and connects back to the introduction, demonstrating some cohesion.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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