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These days Internet –based courses have become a popular alternative to University – based courses. Some students prefer this type of learning because they do not need to attend lectures. Others argue that it is important to study at university. Discuss both these views and give your opinion

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There is often debate on the issue that internet-based courses are
poupular
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popular
in
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with
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 youngsters as they don't need to go outside to attend the lectures
while
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,
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apply
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other
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others
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 believe that
studing
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studying
in
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at
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 university is far
important
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more important
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 than
learn
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learning
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 from online study material.
This
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eassy
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essay
easy
 will discuss both
concers
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concerns
 and mention my personal view on the same in upcoming paragraphs.

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language
Ensure correct spelling, particularly for 'popular' and 'studying'. Minor inaccuracies can affect clarity.
task achievement
Consider adding more specific examples to support your points regarding the advantages and disadvantages of both learning methods.
coherence and cohesion
Improve transitions between ideas to enhance the flow of your arguments.
structure
The introduction clearly states the topic and outlines that both views will be discussed, which sets the stage for the essay.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • flexibility
  • customized learning
  • interactive platforms
  • resource availability
  • face-to-face interaction
  • networking opportunities
  • collaboration
  • hands-on experiences
  • internships
  • structured environment
  • self-discipline
  • personal development
  • extracurricular activities
  • learning pace
  • degree qualification
  • educational experience
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