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Air transport is increasingly used to export types of fruits and vegetables to countries where they cannot be grown or are out of season. Some people say it is a good thing, but other people think it can't be justified. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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In recent years, the supply chain market for edibles has skyrocketed. It is an ongoing debate whether veggies and fruits should be exported to the different countries where those are not available. I will share my opinions on both the views in the following paragraphs.
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 with, exporting fruits and vegetables via air is on the pricey side. As there are a lot of countries which are still developing and have more population, might not be able to afford the price as the natives might find it on the costly hand.
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, avocados are exported from Mexico to India, there are a lot of citizens unaware of
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 fruit and some deny buying it because of the cost.
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, avocados are not much celebrated in India,
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 the health benefits are worth consuming.
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, there are high risks of damaging goods
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 transporting via air, because of the environment, temperature or getting damaged
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 loading or unloading.
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, the positive side would be, that different nations will be able to experience unique tastes and innumerable health benefits.
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, dates are exported worldwide from Arab countries, especially to cold regions, as consuming dates gives warmness to the body and purifies blood.
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, food becomes more tastier if some products are added in the process.
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 as, coconuts are exported mostly from tropical regions which enhances the different cuisines
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 as Thai dishes and South Indian dishes.
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, consuming different country's cuisine
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 enhances the cultural knowledge and trying out new dishes.
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, the food which is beneficial to people in the long run should be consumed, even if it is on the pricier side but the food which lacks
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 should be abandoned.
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, transportation will increase the political relations between the nations and will help in the increase of the respective country's economy.

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task achievement
Your introduction provides a clear premise, but it could better outline the specific viewpoints that you will discuss. Consider briefly stating the pros and cons in your introduction for clearer guidance.
coherence and cohesion
Some of your ideas could benefit from clearer transitions to help the flow of the narrative. For instance, explicitly linking the benefits mentioned in the second body paragraph to the point of cultural enrichment could strengthen coherence.
coherence and cohesion
Be careful with word choices and sentence structures; for example, 'on the pricey side' could be more formally expressed as 'expensive' or 'costly,'
task achievement
You presented both sides of the argument, which is crucial for a discussion essay. This helps demonstrate your understanding of the topic.
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Your examples, such as avocados and dates, are relevant and effective in illustrating your points about costs and benefits of air transport for food.
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