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The aim of this report is to analyse the graph presented and make relevant comparisons. The line graph illustrates the average of the UK commuters travel habits by day, car, bus or train from 1970-2030.

The aim of this report is to analyse the graph presented and make relevant comparisons. The line graph illustrates the average of the UK commuters travel habits by day, car, bus or train from 1970-2030.
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The aim of
this
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 report is to analyse the graph presented and make relevant comparisons. The line graph illustrates the average of the UK
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commuters
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 travel habits by day,
car
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,
bus
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 or
train
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 from 1970-2030. The
car
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 is the most popular out of all presented vehicles as around 5
million
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 people commuted from 1970 til1980 and had hit 6
millions
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million
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 in 1990 after that it has increased steadily and it is estimated that it will reach 9
million
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commuters
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 in 2030.
Train
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usage
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 has a similar trendline as
car
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usage
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 but
in
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the presented timeline has around 3
million
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less
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commuters
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 compared to cars. It is
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 predicted that it will rise in the future and will reach around 5
million
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commuters
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. The
usage
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 of buses is quite different from trains and cars, as it
starts
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 at around 4
million
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commuters
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 in 2010 and gradually
decreases
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decreased
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 over time to 3
million
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 now and will continue
to
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its
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 pattern till 2030. Around 2015
bus
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usage
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 was surpassed by
train
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usage
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 at around 3.5
million
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commuters
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.
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, the number of
car
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commuters
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 is the highest of all presented vehicles and will continue to grow in 2030, the
train
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usage
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 follows a similar trendline as
car
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usage
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 at lower numbers and overtakes
bus
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usage
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 as
the
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bus
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usage
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 is gradually falling.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words commuters, car, bus, train, million, usage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "presented" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "comparisons" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "presented" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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