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Most countries spend much money on education as they start to realize the importance of education. In your opinion, which two subjects are the most important for young people and which one is least important. (Subjects : Literature, sports, music, economics,mathematics, physics, history, music, geography).

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Introduction
Most
counries
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countries
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budget
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 to education based on
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the
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needs
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 that they discovered. Choose two
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 from the most important option to
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the least
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 it's not easy because people with
diffrent
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different
background
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backgrounds
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 and
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a veriety
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veriety
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variety
 of skills need specific education that
help
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 them to have
good
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learn
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 path and
good
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a good
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 career.
Body paragraph 1
But if
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want
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 choose just two
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beilive
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believe
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choose
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 topics that help people
two
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to
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 active both
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 of their brain. Based on
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 logic I choose mathematics and
music
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Persopnally
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Personally
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 think, mathematics of the most important
field
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person
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the person
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 who a young man or woman
because
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this
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field
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as
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is
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a
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fundamental
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 for
other
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field
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. These days
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topics related to artificial intelligence
contatin
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contain
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very
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 usability in other
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, and mathematics is
a
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 most important thing that a
person
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need
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for
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 learn about
it
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apply
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Body paragraph 3
Music
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one
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is one
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 of the best
choice
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choices
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 for
help
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pepole
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people
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creative
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a creative
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person
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.
In these
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 days creativity is a skill that
don'
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t
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allocated
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 to a specific
field
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, every
person
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in
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every where
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everywhere
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need
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 it to create some solution that
cheaper
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, faster or different other solutions. So
Music
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have
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last
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the last
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 row in
table
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the table
a table
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 of important
choice
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 but it doesn'
t
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 mean countries should skip it.
Conclusion
Finally
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,
Music
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 it's
candidate
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a candidate
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 for
least
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the least
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importatn
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important
 option but it doesn'
t
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 mean we don'
t
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 need it.

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language
Make sure to proofread your essay to correct spelling and grammatical errors, such as 'counries' to 'countries' and 'importatn' to 'important'.
coherence
Enhance the logical flow of ideas by using linking words and phrases. For example, phrases like 'In addition', 'Moreover', or 'On the other hand' can help connect your ideas better.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples or explanations to reinforce your arguments. For instance, you could elaborate on how mathematics specifically aids in artificial intelligence beyond just stating its importance.
positive
The choice of subjects (mathematics and music) is thoughtful and shows an understanding of their different roles in education.
Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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