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Band 4.5

Around the world it is likely that more adults will work from home and more children will study from home, as computer technology becomes cheaper and more accesible . Do you think this will be a positive or negative development.

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As of the
Covid-19
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 situation,
technologies
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 and innovations have been used to help
people
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can
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still to
working
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work
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 or
studying
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study
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their
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home including these systems have been worked until the present day.
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,
another
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people
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 side
beleive
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believe
 that doing something
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 is the method that
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 more effective than online operation.
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, there
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 two sides
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 the thought which impact
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different results. The
technologies
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nowadays have been extremely developed to
can
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perform any
king
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kind
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 of things in online
platform
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platforms
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for example
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, working or studying from home, socializing in entertainment platforms, or purchasing goods in E-commerce areas, which
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are
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 more
convience
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convenient
 and
accesible
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accessible
 to living. Plus, the necessary devices like computers or
smart phones
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smartphones
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 are slightly cheaper
compare
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compared
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 to the past. With manufacturing and processing
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having
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 been
enhancement
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enhanced
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 a lot, producers or
distributor
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distributors
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 can make a low price for these
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
pieces of equipment
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.
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other
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the other
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hands
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hand
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, even the
technologies
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numberous
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numerous
of
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advantages, in
negative
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the negative
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 part, these make
people
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have
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less
of
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interactive in real situations.
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,
people
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 reduce time to come out of home, Outdoor
activites
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activities
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popular
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as popular
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 as before, or
it
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they
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 slightly decrease basic survival skills
such
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 as cooking, sleeping
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anywhere, or communicating without
internet
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the internet
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.
From
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 that
reasons
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reason
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, some
people
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on
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of
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 the
disadvatage
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disadvantage
disadvantages
curses
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 and try to go outside more. In my opinion, the evolution of
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technologies
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technology
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have
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has
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 both
of
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apply
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positive and negative
that cause
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effects
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to
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on
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people
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. It depends
to
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on
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 each person who can adapt to
bring
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make
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 these innovations more suitable and
effeciency
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efficiency
efficient
.
Moreover
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, If you cannot use
with
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it with
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fully
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full
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 performance, It can be turned into
difficult
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a difficult
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 time as well.

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language
Improve grammatical accuracy in your sentences, specifically with subject-verb agreements and sentence structures. For instance, 'technologies and innovations have been used to help people can still to working' should be revised for clarity and correctness.
structure
Work on providing more structured paragraphs with clear topic sentences and supporting details to enhance the flow of ideas.
content
Add more specific examples to support your arguments. For example, mention specific technologies that facilitate work and study from home.
content
You addressed both positive and negative aspects of working and studying from home, showcasing a balanced viewpoint.
content
Your introduction sets a relevant context by referencing the Covid-19 situation, linking it to the current trend of remote work and study.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • telecommuting
  • remote learning
  • flexibility
  • productivity
  • work-life balance
  • digital divide
  • accessibility
  • social skills
  • motivation
  • discipline
  • geographical location
  • inclusive
  • educational resources
  • technology access
  • disparities
  • well-being
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