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Band 4.5

Some people want governments to spend money looking for life on other planets. Others, however, think this is a waste of public money when there are so many problems on earth. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from own knowledge or experience.

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Most citizens wish
governments
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 to use
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money
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the money
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 on
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the exploratiion
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exploratiion
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exploration
explorations
 of
possibility
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the possibility
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 of mankind on other planets.
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Although
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However
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 some of them
,
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apply
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thinks
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think
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its
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it's
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 useless to utilize public income when there is a
lot
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 happening
on
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in
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motherland
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the motherland
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. I would argue that finding life on other planets is more
imporant
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important
 than solving problems on
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earth
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Earth
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. I strongly believe that
,
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 there is a necessity for
researches
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research
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 on places which we
dont
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don't
 have a complete idea
on
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about
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it
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apply
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. Because by seeing the things that are happening, we need to put a
lot
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 more effort
on
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into
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 finding things which are
rightnow
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right now
 almost impossible for everyone.
we
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We
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 need to come
into
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to
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 our senses that exploration is a part of our life and
due to
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 it only we came these far from early hominids. We polluted the
earth
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 as much as possible
alongside
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and
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 we are listening about natural disasters happening frequently as
eploitations
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exploitation
exploitations
 of resources by mankind
became
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become
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 unstoppable. What I think is
we
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if we
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 destroy something
then
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 we
also
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 should take the responsibility of making it right.
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while
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 we cannot change what happened to our mother
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earth
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Earth
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, the only thing we can do is to
less
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lessen
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 the burden on
motherland
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the motherland
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 by discovering an alternative.
For instance
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, recently in
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Kerala
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kerala
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kerala,
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 a district called
wayanad
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Wayanad
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 had completely swept
way
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away
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due to
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landslide
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a landslide
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. Why do
u
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you
 think
this
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 happened
.
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?
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The obvious reason is human exploitation
in contrast
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, yet we are not ready to quit it and in
future
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future,
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 a
lot
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 more of
this
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 destruction is going to happen. A way to stop all these is
finging
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finding
alternative
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alternatives
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.What do
u
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you
 mean by finding
alternative
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an alternative
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 it is nothing but making our existence possible
on
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in
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other area
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another area
other areas
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 rather than
motherland
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the motherland
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.
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, there are disadvantages
also
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. To do anything we require
money
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, where do
u
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you
 think that we get it from
.
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?
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 It is common that we get from
governments
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 again the same question arises where will they get the final answer is
its
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it
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 public
money
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 and do
u
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you
 think that everyone
are
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is
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 willing to give
money
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 just like that without asking no right even if we ask we won't get it . So the
governments
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 came
with
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up with
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 a clever idea
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that
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which
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 is tax. Through
tasks
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tasks,
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 they can get the amount they require to spend on necessities for people
unnder
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under
 them.
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, if we
see
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look at
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 the present
situations
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situation
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 we all are paying a
lot
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 of GSTS on every small thing that we are using including food items like rice, oils etc
..
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.
...
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 In conclusion, I strongly agree that
governments
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 should make use of
resources
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the resources
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 they get from people and spend them on researches that make livelihood possible
on
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in
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 other areas which helps
for
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apply
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people on
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earth
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Earth
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for
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in
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future
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the future
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.

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task achievement
Your essay presents relevant ideas, but the points could be more clearly developed and expanded. Try to provide more detailed explanations and examples to strengthen your argument.
coherence and cohesion
Consider using more varied linking words and phrases to improve the overall flow of your essay. This will help guide the reader through your arguments more smoothly.
coherence and cohesion
Work on the clarity of your sentences. Some sentences are a bit confusing and could be simplified for better understanding. Make sure your points are easy to follow.
task achievement
You provided a clear opinion in your introduction, which is crucial for addressing the task.
task achievement
Your effort to include personal experience and current events makes your essay relatable and engaging.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unprecedented opportunities
  • extraterrestrial
  • satisfy human curiosity
  • practical benefits
  • inspiring goal
  • testament to human ambition
  • pursuit of knowledge
  • critics argue
  • imprudent
  • plague Earth
  • immediate attention
  • allocated for
  • environmental conservation
  • well-being
  • quality of life
  • balanced approach
  • advancements
  • benefits for humanity
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