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The chart below shows the changes in three different areas of crime in Manchester city centre from 2003-2012

The chart below shows the changes in three different areas of crime in Manchester city centre from 2003-2012
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The line graph given represents
statics
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statistics
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 of the three
act
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acts
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 of
crimes
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crime
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that
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which
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 are burglary,
car
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 theft and robbery performed in a downtown of one of the main cities of
United
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the United
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 Kingdom
that is
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 Manchester over a 10-year period. It is obvious that, all three graphsunderwent completely different passes. As it is seen from the chart above burglary has experienced a drastic reduction in the numbers comparing the initial part of the survey with its end.
Whereas
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the
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apply
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car
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 theft increased, and robbery remained stable. In 2003 burglary was the most common crime performed in
center
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the center
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 of Manchester city with around 3500 acts. In
following
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the following
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 5 years it hits its minimum becoming nearly1000 in 2008.
This
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 figure slightly increased to almost 1500 within
next
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the next
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 4
year
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years
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 by 2012.
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,
car
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 theft and robbery were more or less the same
throughoutmost
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throughout most
through out most
 of the chunk of the tracked period, with the noticeable increase
of
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the
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car
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 thefts in the
last
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 couple of
yearsoccupying
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years occupying
 top of the chart.

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