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The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Percentage of national consumer expenditure by category - 2002

The table below gives information on consumer spending on different items in five different countries in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Percentage of national consumer expenditure by category - 2002
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The table
illustrate
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illustrates
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 the proportion of expenditure on three categories of
item
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items
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 in five countries namely; Ireland, Italy, Spain,
Sweden
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, and Turkey in 2002.
Overall
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, all the countries
spend
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spent
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 most money on food and drinks
alonside
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alongside
 tobacco,
while
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least
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the least
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 area of expenditure remained leisure and education.
To begin
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 with,
majority
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the majority
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 of money
were
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was
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 spent on
dietery
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dietary
 items,
such
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 as food, drinks and tobacco, with Turkey spending the most amount at 32.14%, followed by Ireland, which recorded
an expenses
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an expense
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 of almost 30%.
In contrast
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, Spain , Italy, and
Sweden
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spend
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spent
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 the lowest on
this
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 category with each spending less than 20%, and
Sweden
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 spent the least at just 15.77%.
However
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, in terms of clothing and footwear, each country
spend
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spends
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 less than 10% of their income, with Italy spending the most money on clothes and shoes at 9.00% and
Sweden
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record
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recording
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 the lowest (just as
previous
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a previous
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 category) at 5.40%.
In contrast
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,leisure activities and education
is
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are
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 the least favourite
area
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areas
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 of spending with all the countries accounting
to
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for
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 below 5% of expenditure. Turkey
record
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recorded
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 the highest amount of spending
in
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on
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this
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these
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 activities, with 4.35%, followed by
Sweden
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 and Italy, spending
similar
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a similar
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 amount of about 3.20%,
whereas
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 Spain only spent 1.98% on leisure and education.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sweden with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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