Some people think that the best way to solve global environment problems is to increase the cost of fuel. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people assume that one of the solutions to solve global warming is to increase the cost of fuel, and
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agree with
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statement
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the negative impact
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have on the environment of the world. Increasing the cost of fuel will lead individuals to buy electricity that does not harm the environment and is environment friendly, in order to save money
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of wasting it on
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. On the one hand, increasing the charge of
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will make a major shift in behaviours of buying
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, where choosing a
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will depend
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on the
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gas saving
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rather than the engine size,
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many people care about the
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's power and
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power and speed but
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not a big problem because there are
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that are strong and still are
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climate friendly
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,
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, tesla electric
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are strong, fast and does not need any
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that
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the global
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, some people despite the thought of
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being a lifesaver for the global warming matter, because of the damage it causes to the global
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from
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that
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the batteries. saying that even through increasing the amount of fuel the damage will still remain and
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a misleading assumption. In conclusion, increasing the charge of
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will help in reducing the problems in the global
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problems caused by
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and will lead to new habits in buying decisions by fussing
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that less consume
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,
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will make a major impact in the long-term leading to reduce a significant amount of problems.

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Try to provide a clearer thesis statement in the introduction to outline your position and key points more explicitly.
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Ensure that each paragraph includes a clear topic sentence that relates directly to your main argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
Check for grammatical errors and clarity in your sentences to enhance the readability of your essay.
Task Achievement
You have presented a clear opinion regarding the increase of fuel costs and its potential effects on consumer behavior.
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Your use of examples, such as Tesla electric cars, adds relevance and depth to your argument.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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