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Band 4.5

Some individuals believe that living in a house has many advantages while others argue that living in apartment has more benefits discuss both views and give your opinion

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Some
people
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now a days
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nowadays
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perfer
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prefer
 living in a
house
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whereas
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 others believe that
ownig
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owning
 an apartment has more benefits.  There is no denying that
live
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living
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 in a
house
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 or an apartment has
it
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its
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owns
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own
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 drawbacks and
pro
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pros
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. it is commonly spread that living in a building is more
effitiont
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efficient
 and convenient for
peoplen
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people
 who are coming out of age. living in a flat does not require
alot
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a lot
 of chores and
hold
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holding
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 accountable for
there
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their
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 actions.
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, the capabilities of young citizens work in unstable jobs
where
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which
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that
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apply
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leads
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lead
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 them to be limited financially with a possibility of changing the location of
there
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their
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 career. owning a
house
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 might not be the best
choice
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however
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 living in a
high rent
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high-rent
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house
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 that
comsume
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consumes
 electricity and water
ending
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ends
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 up with
a
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apply
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high bills to pay.
whereas
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in
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contrast
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contrast,
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 it is an easy
choice
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 to take with
flexibility
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the flexibility
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 of changing locations at any given time.
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hand
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hand,
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 living in a
house
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 is
perfered
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preferred
 for mature and grown
people
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 who
has
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have
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 families. since being mature means that you are less prone to change your own place when it comes to having a family or trust fund.
i
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I
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 think having your own property is an investment where they can provide
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a modren
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modren
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modern
 and
cozy
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cosy
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 place to live in.
stability
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Stability
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 is an important aspect when you are old.  to sum everything up, each of those
are
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is
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 the best
choice
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 for a certain group of
people
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. apartments are a perfect
choice
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 for young
people
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concedring
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considering
conceding
concerning
there
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their
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 financial
deficincy
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deficiency
 and
ownig
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owning
 in
there
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their
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 lives.
Whereas
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,
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house
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the house
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 is mostly
people
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 who
has
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have
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stable
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a stable
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career
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careers
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.

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grammar
Work on your grammar and spelling to improve clarity. For example, 'ownig' should be 'owning' and 'effitiont' should be 'efficient'.
content
Ensure that your ideas are fully developed and supported with examples. This would make your arguments more compelling and persuasive.
style
Try to use a variety of sentence structures to enhance the fluency of your writing. Avoid repetitive sentences that can make your essay feel monotonous.
task achievement
You have addressed both views regarding living in a house and an apartment, which is a crucial requirement of the task.
coherence and cohesion
Your conclusion summarizes the discussion effectively, providing a clear summary of your opinion.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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