In many countries people have to pay for medical care, but some think that it should be a free service provided by the government. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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In some
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there is free healthcare,
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in others, the
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to medical care, is private, and implies the payment of medical bills.
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there are some reasons
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having
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private healthcare can lead to some improvement, in my opinion having
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to medical attention, without directly paying for it, is a fundamental right that all countries should allow.
Trasforming
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Transforming
the health sector into a business, by forcing patients to pay for the services they use, can lead to some benefits.
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, with
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solution, hospitals do not have to lean on
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funds
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and can use all the revenue to provide for medical equipment and
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maintenance
.
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,
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hospitals have
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to the newest technologies, and their workers are few of the best specialists in the world.
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, taxes are lower, since they do not cover
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the medical department;
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, the State can spend public money, which they would have used for it, in other ways, like for giving out bonuses to struggling families. Despite these benefits, I believe that having free
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to healthcare is a human right. The type of care you
recieve sould
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receive should
not depend on how much you pay for your insurance, and,
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, is not fair to be forced to pay for basic human needs,
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as visiting the doctor or giving birth.
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, in America, giving birth is really expensive, since you have to pay for every single service you get,
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as delivery and surgery. In conclusion, having to pay for medical bills is unconstitutional, since
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receiving
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receiving
medical care is a human right;
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, by
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practice is possible to improve
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sector and reduce taxes

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Consider rephrasing or restructuring some sentences for clarity. For example, 'Trasforming the health sector...' could be simplified to 'Transforming the healthcare sector into a business...'.
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Strengthen your conclusion by summarizing your main points more clearly and reinforcing your stance. This helps to make your argument more compelling.
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Expand on the positive aspects of free healthcare in your examples, perhaps including more specifics about the impact on society as a whole, to provide a well-rounded view.
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You present a clear opinion on the topic, which is essential in IELTS essays.
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Your essay provides relevant examples to support your argument, particularly regarding the costs of childbirth in America.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • universal coverage
  • equity
  • fundamental human right
  • out-of-pocket expenses
  • financial hardship
  • preventative measures
  • social contract
  • quality of care
  • high demand
  • limited resources
  • tax implications
  • budget priorities
  • universal healthcare systems
  • public health
  • disease burden
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