Some people think that the main influence on young people's diet is advertising rather than family and friends. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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adolescences'

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get easily carried away by

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promotional videos or short

stories

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story

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advert

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any media platforms, despite having family and friends to encourage them to

eating

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eat

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healthy

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. I completely agree that young minds can be challenging to inspire in the midst of all trending

habits

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that circulate influencing a large audience. Fancy

food

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products

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have been trending

due to

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catchy advertisements' shown on various media

such

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as televisions, cinemas, Instagram reels, and other platforms.

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, consuming excess

red bull

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is injuries to our health, but

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adversting

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advertising

companies make it seem

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popular among youngsters as

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energy drink.

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to that, pizza,

burger

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and other fast

food

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famous among

people

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that

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can be

cost effective

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; and

consequently

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, lead to obesity. Apart from supporting fancy eating

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, it

also

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promotes them with loads of tempting offers to attract customers.

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, buy one get one free.

People

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value

such

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offers because they not only save money but

also

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give more. Many

people

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survive the whole day drinking coffee or soft

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drinks

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and avoid

eat

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healthy

food

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just to fit in

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popular groups.

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, there are adversities that encourage healthy

food

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habits

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like,

oat meals

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oatmeals

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, salads, juice etc.

yet

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apply

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people

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sometime

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ignore them

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greater

temptational

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temptation

temptations

offers and

included

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include

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them

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in their meals. To summarize, the advertised

food

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preferences on social media

has

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highly targeted

youngster

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youngsters

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to consume processed

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items , that can be unhealthy if

regulary

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regularly

consumed. In my

opinion

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the government must

speard

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spread

awareness

campiagns

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campaigns

toward healthy eating

habits

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among young adults to make

right

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the right

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choices and support family and friends to help navigate

such

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people

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who are inclined towards packet

food

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items.

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task achievement

Your arguments are relevant, but they could be more clearly articulated and better supported with examples. Make sure each point is developed further with more detail.

coherence and cohesion

Improve the logical flow of your ideas. Use linking words and phrases more effectively to connect your thoughts and make the essay easier to follow.

coherence and cohesion

The conclusion could be stronger. Aim to summarize your main arguments more decisively and provide a clear stance on the issue.

task achievement

You provide a clear opinion and position on the topic, indicating your agreement with the statement.

task achievement

The use of examples from contemporary advertising practices shows your awareness of the topic, which enhances your argument.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

284 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

dietary choices
advertising
commercial interests
cultural traditions
peer influence
nutrition awareness
targeted marketing
endorsement
eating habits
unhealthy foods
social media channels
peer pressure
influencers
persuasive advertisements
nutritional knowledge

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