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The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2003, and projections for 2050.

The bar chart shows the percentage of the total world population in 4 countries in 1950 and 2003, and projections for 2050.
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The graph illustrates the total world population
rate
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 in four countries (
India
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, China, the United States of America, and
Japan
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) in 1950 and 2003 and predicted for 2050.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 China and
India
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 have the highest percentage of population,
while
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 the
USA
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 and
Japan
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 have the lowest percentage over the given period.
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, all of the three countries (China, the
USA
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 and
Japan
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) show a downward trend except
India
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. In 1950,
India
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's population
rate
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 was 15%
then
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 increased gradually to nearly 18% in 2003, and expected to grow to 20% by 2050.
On the other hand
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,
Chinese
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 were almost 25% at the beginning of the period. after which, the
rate
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 declined slowly to 20% in 2003, and it
expected
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 to reach 15%
at the end
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 of the period. In terms of the
USA
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 and
Japan
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, the
USA
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 was at its peak by nearly 6% in 1950,
then
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 the
rate
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 decreased to 5% in 2003 and it will remain the same in 2050.
In contrast
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,
Japan
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's percentage was the lowest throughout the years compared to other countries.
the
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 figure started
about
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at about
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 4% in 1950 and faced a slight decline
about
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of about
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 3% in 2003, and will fall dramatically to approximately 1% in 2050.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words rate, india, japan, usa with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • percentage
  • total world population
  • countries
  • 1950
  • 2003
  • projections
  • 2050
  • comparison
  • trend
  • increase
  • decrease
  • stable
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