The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities.

The graph and table below show the average monthly temperatures and the average number of hours of sunshine per year in three major cities.
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The graph illustrates the average
temperature
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monthly and the annual
hours
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of
sunshine
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in 3 different
country
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countries
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namely :
London
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, New
York
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, and
Sydney
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.
Overall
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, all 3 cities withness
fluctuation
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a fluctuation
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in
temperature
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thoughout
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throughout
the
year
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in which July seemed to be the hottest month in New
York
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and
London
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while
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Sydney
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is
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had
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in highest
temperature
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in
Febuary
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February
.
Beside
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Besides
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, New
York
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is the city that has the highest
hours
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of
sunshine
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, compared to the others.
In
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At
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the beginning of the
year
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,
Syney
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Sydney
is the hottest city with over 25
degrees
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which
far
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is far
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more
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apply
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higher than
London
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and
NewYork
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New York
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, with nearly 10
degrees
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and around 5
degrees
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respectively. In the next 2 months, the
temperature
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in
Sydney
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almost remains
unchange
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unchanged
while
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the
pther
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other
cities show a slight increase. From March to June, apart from
Sydney
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whose
temperature
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decreases remarkably, both New
York
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and
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London
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London's
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temperature
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temperatures
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increase significantly, reaching their peaks at 30
degrees
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and
neraly
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nearly
25
degrees
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in July respectively. In the remaining months,
Sydney
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enters Summer with the
temperature
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climbing up to 25
degrees
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. Meanwhile, with the advent of Winter
London
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and
NewYork
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New York
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show
a dramatic drops
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a dramatic drop
dramatic drops
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to the starting point
at the end
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of the
year
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. The total annual
hours
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of
sunshine
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for New
York
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is 2,535
hours
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, doubling that for
London
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.
Follows
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Followed
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by
Sydney
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with 2,473
hours
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of
sunshine
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per
year
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words temperature, hours, sunshine, london, york, sydney, year, degrees with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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