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The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India’s gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000.

The bar chart below shows the sector contributions to India’s gross domestic product from 1960 to 2000.
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The bar chart presents detailed information about the proportion of gross domestic product in India over the given period.
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, it can be observed that
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 there
were
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 a slight fluctuation in
proportion
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the proportion
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 of industry.
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 upward trend was true for agriculture and social
services
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. Looking at the details, at
first,
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in 1960 the percentage of industry
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along with
services
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ware
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 similar
with
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 about 15 %
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 the highest rate belonged to agriculture
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 about 65 %. After that GDP in agriculture decreased slowly from 65
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 to approximately 45 % the next 20
yaers
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years
.
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, the following two decades were fortunate for
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the amount
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 of industrial and other
services
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 where
it
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witnessed over the quarter between 1970 to 1980. The
services
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 increased dramatically
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last
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 two decades and reached
its
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their
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 peak in 2000. (from 25 % to almost 65 %). It is
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 clear that
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 India’s
GPD
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GDP
 for
manufacture
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manufacturing
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 remained stable at about 25 % from 1980 to 2000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words services with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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