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2.Many economically developed countries give economic support to poorer regions, although there may be benefits, some critics say that this policy does more harm than good. Discuss both side of arguments.

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A lot of economically developed
countries
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provides
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 economic support to developing
regions
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, as there are
alot
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a lot
 of advantages
by
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 doing so, as
people
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 in other
regions
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 can get
the
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access
for
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to
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 the resources equally to those in developed or rich
countries
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.
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, some argue that
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 does harm more than good.
People
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 will have different opinions on
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 topic, as
people
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 from
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developed
countries
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 would think that
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 is unfair because their country should be the priority to spend the money for their own economy and investment. Equally,
people
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 in poor
regions
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 would believe that their
regions
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 deserve it because they are the victims of the
economy
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 system and they should have the same chance as
people
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 in rich
countries
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.
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 some
people
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 in poor
regions
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 would think that they are
deservant
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deserving
 of the support, it could be
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 the argument under capitalism, as
capatialism
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capitalism
 can be defined by: where rich
people
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 get at the top of the pyramid,
whereas
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 poor
people
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 will be stuck and will never
developed
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develop
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 because they are not getting their full chance.
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, poor
people
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 will stay forever poor,
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 rich
people
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 will stay rich. In conclusion, political and past
hisotry
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history
 between
regions
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 could be the reason behind
this
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 problem.

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structure
Ensure that the introduction clearly outlines the main points that will be discussed in the essay. A stronger introduction will help guide the reader throughout the essay.
structure
Your conclusion should summarize the key arguments made in the essay. It should not introduce new ideas but rather reinforce the points you discussed.
content
Provide more specific examples to support your arguments. For instance, mention specific developed countries and how their economic support has impacted poorer regions.
clarity
Clarify your points by using more precise language. For example, instead of saying 'some people in poor regions,' you could specify which regions or populations you're referring to.
content
The essay identifies both sides of the argument which shows an understanding of the complexity of the issue.
content
You have demonstrated your ability to engage with the topic, presenting a discussion around the implications of economic support.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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