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Traditional schooling is out of date, boring and stifles natural talents. various professionals have pushed for an educational revolution. Are there alternatives in the educational system. Is traditional education doing more harm than good? Give reasons for your answer.

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Dear
sir
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Sir
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 or Madam I heard of many spirits about your
hotel
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. I want to get your
hotel
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. The mining gave feedback on family
visit
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visits
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. I want to take a
basy
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basic
 house. I want a
hotel
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 for
week
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a week
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 for 3 beds for 2 people for 2 adults. I want a room with a big compact decorative room for children. If you have
such
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 rooms let me know. I wanted to know what you will take to the prizes in your
hotel
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. From prizes:Wi-fi ,TV, various drinks and sweets were very wonderful. We know interesting places near your
hotel
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. We know that
theaters
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theatres
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 are available in your
hotel
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 and the presence of various sports features. I look forward to hearing from you soon . Yours sincerely. Gulinigor

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clarity
Revise the introduction to more clearly state your purpose for writing and ensure it directly addresses the prompt.
depth
Develop your main points further with examples or explanations to strengthen your argument.
structure
Enhance the overall structure by using clear paragraphs for each main idea, starting with topic sentences that outline the point of each paragraph.
content
The essay shows an understanding of the topic and attempts to address the prompt with relevant points.
language
Some variety in vocabulary is evident, which is a positive aspect of your writing.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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