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It is thought by some that it is better to live in a city, while others believe that life is better in the countryside Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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There is an ongoing debate about whether
city
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 living or country living is more desirable. In my opinion, I believe that residing in urban areas is much better, as they have a lot to offer.
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 to healthcare. On the one hand, many
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 think living in the
city
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 is
is
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quite advanced because it has its advantages.For one , cities offer a wide range of job
opportunites
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opportunities
, especially in well-developed industries. They
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 public transportation systems, making it easy for
people
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 to get around or even run errands.
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, cities have a lot of
acces
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access
 to education, making it easy for
people
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 to choose where they want to study as there are a lot of options.
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 reason,I believe living in the cities offers opportunities for growth and development.
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, some
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 think living in the
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 might be considered better, because the pace of life is a bit slower and more peaceful, allowing
people
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 to relax and be calm, and to do things
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 their own time without pressure. Rural areas offer unity in
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, with neighbours often knowing and supporting each other.
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, the cost of living in
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rural
area
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 is often lower and
people
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 may enjoy
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 sense of freedom and independence. Living in the
city
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 provides better
access
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 to health care as there are more hospitals and clinics than in the
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rural
rurals
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rural
 areas, and the urban hospitals have
access
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 to the latest medical equipment and advances in medical technology
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, some
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 prefer an urban lifestyle,
while
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 others argue that rural living offers a better quality of life
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while
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 living in the
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 provides
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great
graet
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great
access
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 to quality healthcare services

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task achievement
While you provided good arguments for both sides, ensure that each point is fully developed with examples and explanations to enhance clarity.
coherence and cohesion
Be mindful of minor grammatical errors, such as repeated words, spaces, and misspellings. Proofreading can improve language accuracy significantly.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to use a variety of linking words and phrases to improve the flow of your writing. For instance, using phrases like 'in addition,' or 'furthermore' can help connect ideas better.
task achievement
You presented a clear opinion on the topic, which is essential for task achievement. Your essay structure is logical, with an introduction, corresponding body paragraphs, and a conclusion.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • metropolitan
  • infrastructure
  • cosmopolitan
  • commute
  • sociocultural
  • prosperity
  • sustainability
  • rural
  • tranquility
  • urbanization
  • relocation
  • residential
  • populace
  • ecological footprint
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