IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 7

The maps below show the changes of a school from 1985 to the present time. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The maps below show the changes of a school from 1985 to the present time. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
The maps illustrate the layout of a
school
Use synonyms
 in 1985 and the changes that have been made to it in the present day.
Overall
Linking Words
, the
school
Use synonyms
 has undergone significant internal renovations, including the addition of modern recreational and learning facilities,
while
Linking Words
 its external features have largely remained the same.
Additionally
Linking Words
, the number of students attending the
school
Use synonyms
 has increased considerably over time. In 1985, the
school
Use synonyms
 featured a large car park in the northern part of the premises, situated between the entrance and exit gates. A small administrative office was positioned in the far northern corner, adjacent to the
school
Use synonyms
 library, which was located in the western section. A two-story classroom block stood in the eastern part of the
school
Use synonyms
, with a road running through the
center
Change the spelling
centre
show examples
, separating the two classroom buildings. Meanwhile, a spacious playground occupied the entire southern section of the
school
Use synonyms
. At present, the
school
Use synonyms
 has undergone significant transformation, particularly in its internal layout.
While
Linking Words
 the car park, office, and entrance and exit gates have remained unchanged, new recreational and academic facilities have been introduced. The
school
Use synonyms
 library has been replaced by a learning resources
center
Change the spelling
centre
show examples
 and a computer room, and several additional classrooms have been constructed, increasing the
school
Use synonyms
’s capacity.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, the once expansive playground has been downsized to accommodate a swimming pool and a fitness
center
Change the spelling
centre
show examples
.
Additionally
Linking Words
, the road that previously divided the
school
Use synonyms
 has been removed and replaced with green spaces and trees

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "additionally, while".
▼
Vocabulary: Replace the words school with synonyms.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
▼
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
▼
Topic Vocabulary:
  • expansion
  • modernized
  • remodeled
  • facilities
  • playground
  • comprise
  • extracurricular activities
  • recreational area
  • academic resources
  • structure
What to do next:
Look at other essays: