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It is argued that university student should study a full range of subjects, instead of some specific subjects? To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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subjets
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 rather than
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course
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 can help a student in many ways than one, I agree that one has to take all the subjects which
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 them to be experts in their field of choice
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 having a brief knowledge across other disciplines First of all, A student who has hopes of becoming a software engineer should undertake all the necessary courses to land him a job
as well as
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work place
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 and employment
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course
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 which can help him understand the law of the land where he is going to be employed at
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 since he will be working with
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different
 types of people
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around
 it is advantageous for him to take a diversity
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 that can help him succeed in his
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. Second of all, Only committed to learning what's required will surely place you in the race to complete
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 it's not an ideal choice for
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 university level student Assuming he hasn't had a real job,
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 often than not majority of the younger generation have problems with money and time management
this
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 could
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have
 been prevented if they could have taken a
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 on finance rather than skipping, university education is meant to impart education useful in daily life. To sum it up, It may not seem useful in the short run,
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, in the long run as these kids
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integrate
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the
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society education plays a crucial role including the way you react
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 people, manage money foster friendships and
planning
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 a grocery haul for holistic health.
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 would promote that full courses irrespective of the certain
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courses
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courses
 needed

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language
Ensure correct spelling and grammar. Check your essay for typos like 'subjets', 'differnet', and 'integrrdate'.
content
Clarify your main ideas more distinctly. Each paragraph should explicitly relate back to the main argument: 'the importance of studying a full range of subjects'.
coherence
To improve the flow, ensure transitions between sentences and ideas are smoother. Use linking words and phrases to connect your thoughts better.
task achievement
Add specific examples to support your points. For instance, mention actual skills that might be beneficial in diverse topics.
task achievement
You present a clear opinion on the topic and maintain a consistent stance throughout the essay.
coherence
Your ideas about the benefits of a well-rounded education (like understanding diverse topics for workplace success) are relevant to the argument.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Holistic education
  • Critical thinking
  • Creativity
  • Interdisciplinary skills
  • Adaptability
  • Personal development
  • Academic motivation
  • Cultural awareness
  • Globalized world
  • Engaged learners
  • Well-rounded character
  • Diverse subjects
  • Career preparation
  • Knowledge base
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