the crime rate nowdays is decreasing compared to the past time due to advance technology which can prevent and solve crime .Do you agree or disagree?

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The advancement of
technology
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has impacted criminal activities. Some people believe that innovation in crime prevention led to
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of traditional
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.Others contend that modern
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has introduced new
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such
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as cyber
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and frauds in the digital realm.I personally believe that ,
although
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developed
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helps to stop
physically
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crimes
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, it
also
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increased
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formed
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new types of
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modern
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technology
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plays a significant role
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criminal
actvities
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which
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to the rate of
crimes
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decreased
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, the introduction of video
survellence
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makes investigation effective and
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as it provides evidence to recognise and
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criminals .The fear of being recorded in CCTV cameras stops
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stunts
such
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as robbery , vandalism and
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theft.
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, new inventions
such
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as alarm systems and
laser protected
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boundries
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offer
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peace of mind for individuals
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they
away
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from their homes.To explain it, developed alarm systems notify to owner of
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properity
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if there is an
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invasion
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making
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more
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safer than
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times. Despite all these benefits
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has
also
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formed other
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.
Cyberthefts
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and invalid financial transactions make life more complicated for people as they are difficult to trace.
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, most
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for their daily needs which
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chance to
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to hack their bank accounts by creating invalid websites or links.
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,
although
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physically
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crimes
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easier
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to investigate with the help of new
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, living
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at
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different country and creating invalid links for financial transactions allow
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criminal
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to invade from justice as they are untraceable. In conclusion,
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traditional
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are decreased
due to
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the advancements of
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in crime
prvention
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, they have
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life complicated for individuals
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the increase of cybercrimes.A prudent approach where
,
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the government and law
enforcements
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work together to make
cybersecruity
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cybersecurity
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more
secured
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can lead to
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decline in
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crime rates.

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task achievement
Your thesis statement presents your perspective clearly, but ensure it flows more smoothly with better sentence structure. Consider revising it for clarity.
coherence
Try to use clearer topic sentences to introduce each paragraph, this will enhance the logical progression of your ideas. Break down ideas more explicitly for better flow.
coherence
Watch for spelling and grammatical errors (e.g., 'surveillance', 'properties'). Proofreading will help improve your score. Also, ensure you use more varied vocabulary.
task achievement
You effectively discussed both the positive and negative impacts of technology on crime, showing a balanced approach to the topic.
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Your use of examples, such as CCTV and alarm systems, was appropriate and relevant, helping to illustrate your points clearly.
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