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The diagram shows the Process of Pu-erh Raw Tea and Ripe Tea. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram shows the Process of Pu-erh Raw Tea and Ripe Tea. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates the
process
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 of producing
Pu-erh
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 raw
tea
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 and ripe
tea
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.
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, the procedure consists of seven main stages, including frying, drying, fermentation, and compression, to achieve the final products. The
process
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 begins with freshly harvested green leaves being fried to inactivate the enzymes. Once
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 is done, the leaves are spread evenly on a flat surface and left to dry under the sun. After drying, they become loose raw
tea
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, which can either be compressed directly to form
Pu-erh
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 raw
tea
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 or undergo
further
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 processing. For
Pu-erh
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 ripe
tea
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, the loose raw
tea
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 is subjected to a fermentation
process
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 through
molding
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moulding
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, which alters its chemical composition. Following fermentation, the
tea
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 turns into loose ripe
tea
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. At
this
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 stage, it undergoes compression to form
Pu-erh
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 ripe
tea
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.
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,
Pu-erh
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 raw
tea
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 can be stored for an extended period to develop into vintage
Pu-erh
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 raw
tea
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, enhancing its
flavor
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 and quality over time. In summary, the production of
Pu-erh
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tea
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 involves multiple steps, with the key distinction between raw and ripe
tea
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 being the fermentation
process
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.
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Pu-erh
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 raw
tea
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 is produced directly from loose raw
tea
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,
Pu-erh
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 ripe
tea
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 undergoes fermentation before compression

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