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People living in the 21st century have a better quality of life than people who lived in previous centuries. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is commonly believed by most people that, in
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 21st century, individuals across in better living conditions compared to the previous generations.Personally,
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 anywhere. The foundation of video conferencing tools
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 as Zoom, Microsoft Teams, and FaceTime makes our life more easier than ever before.These platforms allow for real-time communication and screen sharing making it more accessible to organize and attend conferences regardless of location.
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,for maintaining productivity, scheduling meetings has become more convenient and efficient,reducing travel time,
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 and preparing especially for women. At the same time,the integration of technology in healthcare has transformed patient care and treatment.Thanks to rapid improvement,
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, the internet and telephone allow patients to consult with doctors remotely,making healthcare accessible to people in rural or underserved areas.
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,education has become more reachable.
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 development has seen a surge in online courses,global learning and teaching opportunities for people.In
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 way,they have a great chance to shed light on personal and professional growth,irrespective of location and financial status.
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 period. In conclusion, I strongly agree that the 21st century offers a significantly better quality of life, led by advancements in technology, healthcare, education, and living standards. Despite upcoming troubles,the development in various aspects of life makes
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 the latest centuries.

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task achievement
Ensure to clearly define your position in the introduction and explain the extent of your agreement or disagreement with the statement.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to use linking words and phrases to enhance the flow of your arguments and to make connections between your ideas clearer.
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Provide more detailed examples or explanations to support your main points, such as specific statistics or studies related to technology in healthcare or education.
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You present a clear argument in favor of the advancements in the 21st century and how they influence quality of life.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Technological advancements
  • Healthcare improvements
  • Economic growth
  • Social changes
  • Global connectivity
  • Standard of living
  • Life expectancy
  • Gender equality
  • Legal rights
  • Globalization
  • Cultural exchange
  • Access to information
  • Environmental concerns
  • Sustainable development
  • Stress levels
  • Quality of life
  • Medical progress
  • Job opportunities
  • Income disparity
  • Life satisfaction
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