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In recent times, many people are making the decision to leave alone.what are the causes of this? Does iit have positive or negative impact on society

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These days, Being an individual has become a trend for various reasons, which has had a negative impact on the community.
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,
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 are intended to be alone because of various factors and economic impact. has everyone has different lifestyles, well it is one freedom of choice. when
people
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 do not have control over their lives they want to be separated. they like to live without any family members. In fact, parents' manners are the main factor where younger generations do not get emotional support or they
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don't
 learn the values.
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, when younger
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 do not understand their families and their values they leave their homes after 18 years of age
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 unawareness of the lifecycle. as they do not show any kind of interest in marriage relationships.
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, The development has an adverse effect on society as the younger population's contribution towards the economy will slower down as older
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 working will come to retirement age where supply and demand will affect towards country which will be a huge loss to everyone in either way.
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, The Government of China announced
people
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 to marry and have two-plus children, and
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 program was started because of the retirement of
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.
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, the country's economy was falling down
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people
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 living individually.
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, they
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 provided free schemes to attract
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.
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,
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, everyone has their way of living considering facts of mental wellbeing or parental support.
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, it has
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 consequences on countries' economies.
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, the negative impacts outweigh the positive ones.

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Your introduction provides a general idea but could be more specific about the causes and impacts you will discuss.
coherence and cohesion
Enhance the logical flow by strengthening the connection between your ideas and providing clearer transitions between paragraphs.
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Consider adding more robust examples and elaborations to better support your points, particularly in relation to the societal impacts you mention.
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You have identified the impacts of individual living and provided a couple of relevant examples, which show your understanding of the topic.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Independence
  • Personal growth
  • Self-discovery
  • Financial independence
  • Social norms
  • Cultural shifts
  • Individualism
  • Urbanization
  • Technology
  • Loneliness
  • Community
  • Accommodations
  • Desirable
  • Relationships
  • Achievement
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