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Global warming/Climate change are pressing problems that every country and the world will have to deal with in the future. What are the causes of global warming? What are some possible solutions? (Probable question)

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Today,Global warming
are
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 one of the most critical concerns the
world
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encounter
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it
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also
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predict
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predicts
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 possible
problem
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problems
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 for
next
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the next
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 years.There are some reasons which cause
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increasing temperatures
on
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atmosphere
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the atmosphere
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.
This
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 essay will provide proven factors and suitable solutions to overcoming
concern
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concerns
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.
Firstly
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,the atmosphere has a huge impact
in
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 the
world
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.It ensures various benefits
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 as oxygen,weather and so on to
alives
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live
.But there are some negative effects which destroy
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 normal maintenance of climate.Wars,chemical
pollutions
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pollution
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 and greenhouse gases are key reasons
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 involving warming in the
world
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.During the wars,rivals use strict weapons and chemical substances.
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,
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Russian
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Russia
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 and Ukraine have a bias so
this
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 conflict brings global warming process.
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,factories produce significant amounts of greenhouse gases, including CO₂ and methane.
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,it is not one problem
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cause
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causes
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a
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deforestation
among
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in
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 green places.
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,companies obtain natural resources from
environment
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the environment
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instead
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 of cutting trees.
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,there are different ways to overcome concern in the
world
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.The first solution is increasing
amount
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 of sustainable products in society.The governments should engage with
attract
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and attract
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 each organization to implement eco-friendly goods and services during production stages.
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,big companies
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 as Apple and Microsoft which
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Silicon
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in Silicon
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valley
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 in Philadelphia,only use recyclable
equipments
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equipment
types of equipment
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 to
reducing
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 pollution in
environment
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the environment
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,scientists
offers
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offer
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 that
people’
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people’s
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 awareness about climate change and global warming is indeed lower than before.
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,the state must
arranges
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 public awareness campaigns related the global problems.The government may
promotes
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 energy efficiency among inhabitants and organizes the planting of new trees to replace destroyed greenery.
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,in Azerbaijan,the Non-Government organizations arrange green
world
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 projects three times a year. In conclusion,the prevalence of global warming
cause
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causes
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a
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anxiety among people.The
wars
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Wars
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 and
the
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apply
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greenhouse gases are
main
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the main
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 reasons
to
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issue
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this issue
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.
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, it has some solutions
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 as reforestation and eco-friendly goods.So,each organization should understand its obligations in front of the environment.

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introduction
Ensure that your introduction clearly outlines the topics you will discuss; consider rephrasing for clarity and impact.
coherence
Maintain a clearer logical flow between paragraphs; transitions could be improved for better coherence.
task achievement
Include more precise examples to support your main points. Some claims lack specific evidence to enhance your argument.
content
You successfully identify the main causes of global warming and offer potential solutions.
topic engagement
Your awareness of current issues, such as wars and pollution, establishes relevance in your discussion.
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