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Band 2.5

Some people say that university education is the best way to achieve success in life, while others believe it is no longer true. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people argue that taking study in a
university
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 is the most effective way to
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 success
while
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others think that it is unnecessary. Getting formal education that
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ecknowledged
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acknowledged
 by industry or society is the main benefit of
university
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 education, meanwhile having valuable experiences by directly involved in a task is the basic thought of the other view. In recent
situation
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, I agree that
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university
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a university
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 education is the best option for people to get
their
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 better life. There is a
well organized
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 learning system in a
university
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 that can make its
student
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students
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 get the knowledge more effectively. Usually, the school has provided
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well structured
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 curriculum that has been evaluated by the
administartors
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administrators
.
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,
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university
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the university
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 is
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equiped
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equipped
by
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 proper facilities that can support its students,
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 as
library
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a library
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,
reasearch
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research
journal
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journals
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,
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information technology systems, and
class rooms
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. There are
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 many organs in a
university
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such
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senates
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, professors, and lecturers that can help
student
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students
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 in
a
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 learning process.
This
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well
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will
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establish
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 system gives
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ease of learning
for
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 students

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task achievement
Clarify your position in the introduction more explicitly to guide the reader.
coherence
Ensure that paragraphs have clear topic sentences and that ideas are logically linked to improve flow.
task achievement
Provide specific examples to support each point made in your argument.
task achievement
You've demonstrated an understanding of the topic and provided a clear stance on the issue.
task achievement
Your points about university resources and support systems are relevant and reflect on the importance of a structured learning environment.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • achievement
  • acquisition
  • advancement
  • aspiring
  • credentials
  • credentials
  • employment
  • entrepreneurship
  • graduate
  • institutions
  • invest
  • knowledge
  • opportunities
  • pathways
  • perspective
  • networking
  • potential
  • prosperity
  • self-education
  • skills
  • success
  • tuition fees
  • university education
  • valuable
  • vocational
  • worldly knowledge
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