A lot of places in the world rely on tourism as a main source of income. Unfortunately, tourism can also be a source of problems if it is not managed correctly. Describe the advantages and disadvantages of tourism in the modern world. Do you think that benefits of tourism outweight its drawbacks?

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of the most visited country majorly rely on tourists. The amount of currency they spend over there helps the
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to run their livelihood . Not only that economy of that place seems to be boosting a lot .
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most of the countries in Asia like Nepal , India , Vietnam, etc are not earning that well in other fields but the
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gradually
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them to increase their standard of living . The countries are
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maintaining
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more tourists . But there are some negative outcomes
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brings that couldn´t be neglected . Many
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migrate illegally to other countries with
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of crimes and
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of employment opportunities in
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track of the
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visiting the country.That in
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the nation.
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overcrowd
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of explorers in some famous or naturally beautiful
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are getting polluted which is
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the health of the
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residing there. That in
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I think the problems can be eradicated if proper measures are taken . There should be
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on the brighter side and
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the importance
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of
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should be made known to almost every
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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your thesis in the introduction and rephrase it in the conclusion for clarity.
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Use linking words to improve the flow of ideas, such as 'however', 'furthermore', or 'in addition'.
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Provide a more balanced view by elaborating more on both advantages and disadvantages.
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You provided relevant examples to support your points, which is important for task achievement.
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You identified both the advantages and disadvantages of tourism, showing a good understanding of the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Sustainable tourism
  • Ecotourism
  • Heritage sites
  • Cultural heritage
  • Tourism revenue
  • Environmental conservation
  • Eco-friendly
  • Tourist influx
  • Local economy
  • Diversification
  • Commercialization
  • Authenticity
  • Displacement
  • Gentrification
  • Carrying capacity
  • Hospitality industry
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