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An overseas friend wants to visit your country on holiday. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter Recommend the best time of year to visit and why Describe the types of accommodation your friend could choose

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Dear Roshni , I hope you are doing well .
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, congratulations on your graduation .
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 been a long time since I have seen you . We should soon do a meet up as you promised to
visit
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 me after you finish your study . I am really looking forward to
meet
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 you
the
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 coming year . The most suitable time for you to
visit
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 Oslo will be between
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April and August
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. The weather is really pretty during
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 time. The vibe of the city is really vibrant . As we have always loved strolling around cities at night , it will be perfect for us because
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 bright outside till midnight . We can go for dry picnics enjoying the beautiful
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 of nature . I have already handpicked and shortlisted the lakes and mountains we need to
visit
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 . Being apart from you was the saddest part , but seeing you
in
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 every holiday is my
favorite
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 part . With
you
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 I make the best memories . Oslo is really waiting for numerous wonderful memories
going
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 by us . I am really looking forward
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 your response with the
possile
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possible
 date you coming to
visit
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 . With love , Kabina Thapa

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Try to include more details about the types of accommodation available. You could mention hotels, hostels, or vacation rentals and their features to provide a clearer picture for your friend.
coherence and cohesion
Consider organizing your ideas into clearer paragraphs. For instance, one paragraph could focus on the best time to visit and another could cover accommodations. This will enhance the logical flow of your letter.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to check for small grammatical errors, like tense consistency and subject-verb agreement, which can help improve the overall quality of the writing.
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Warm and friendly tone throughout the letter, which reflects well on your relationship with your friend.
coherence and cohesion
Good use of descriptive language to paint a vivid picture of Oslo's vibrant atmosphere and activities you can do together.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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