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Band 5

A museum near your house is looking for people to do part-time vountary/unpaid work. you would like to do some voulntary work at the museum. write a letter to the museum director to apply for voluntary work in letter. explain why you want to do voluntary work at museum. describe some skills and qualities you have that would be useful give details of when you would be available for work.

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Dear Sir/Madam, I hope you are doing well I am writing
this
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 letter to express my willingness toward the voluntary job that you advertised in
you
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the local newspaper and I believe that working in a museum would be a wonderful experience
while
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 contributing to the preservation of art and heritage. I have all the qualities that should be necessary for
this
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 position. I am
multilingual
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a multilingual
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 person it would be easy to communicate
the
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 visitors effectively and provide them
an
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 enriching experience
apart from
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this
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 I am well organised person and would be
benefical
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beneficial
 to the museum's
day to day
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 operations. I am currently
full-time
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recepstionist
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receptionist
 at Plaza
hotel
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 so
i
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 am only free on weekends and during special events. It is very
convient
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convenient
 for me the Museum is only 10
Kilometer
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 far away from my home. You can
scheduel
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schedule
 me
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accordingly
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according
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your
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 needs I am flexible with hours. I hope I will
fullfil
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fulfil
 your all
requuirements
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requirements
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 and looking forward to a positive reply. Yours Sincerely, Anju

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coherence and cohesion
Try to improve the flow of your ideas by using clearer transitions between sentences. For example, adding linking phrases could help.
task achievement
Ensure to maintain a consistent writing tone throughout your letter. While it is mostly friendly, there are minor areas where it could be slightly more formal.
task achievement
The letter addresses all necessary points, showing a clear intention for voluntary work which is commendable.
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Your multilingual ability and organizational skills are well presented as valuable contributions to the museum, showcasing your strengths.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • part-time volunteer
  • cultural heritage
  • community engagement
  • museum curator
  • customer liaison
  • public speaking
  • team collaboration
  • scheduling availability
  • artifact preservation
  • educational workshops
  • multilingual communication
  • curatorial assistance
  • event coordination
  • visitor services
  • exhibit maintenance
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