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Writing Samples
Band 4

Fast food is a part of life in many place. Some people think this has bad effects in lifestyle and diet. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons

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It is irrefutable that diet
Play
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Plays
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crucial
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a crucial
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 role in human life. People have
plethora
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a plethora
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 of choices in eating food and it
up
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is up
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 to them what
would
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they prefer to eat.
Nowadys
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Nowadays
fast
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the fast
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 food industry is
on
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at
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the
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its
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 peak ,
whereas
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 some chunk of people believe
this
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 kind of diet adversely
bad
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a bad
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 effect on
the
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apply
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human life
while
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 some don't consider
this
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. I
personaly
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personally
diagree
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disagree
 with the statement and mention all the
relevent
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relevant
 reasons for my opinion in upcoming paragraphs.

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Coherence and Cohesion
Consider revising the opening sentences for clarity and grammatical correctness. For example, 'Play' should be 'plays', and 'Nowadys' should be 'Nowadays'.
Task Achievement
Make sure to support your main points with specific examples or details to enhance the clarity and depth of your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that you have a clear conclusion that summarizes your points and reinforces your stance. This would improve the overall coherence of your essay.
Task Achievement
Your essay addresses a relevant topic and clearly states your disagreement with the notion that fast food negatively affects lifestyle and diet.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • prevalence
  • sedentary lifestyle
  • culinary culture
  • wholesome meals
  • inherently
  • health consequences
  • nutritional options
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