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You are a member of International students' club. The club is organising an event to celebrate popular food from around the world. What a letter to the event organiser, Luis. In your letter -offer to make a popular dish from your country -describe what this dish is -explain why it should be included in the event

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Dear Luis, I am writing to inform you that if it is possible can you please tell the
couzine
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cuisine
cousins
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 to prepare some special traditional food from my country. Which is called baby corn grill for me.
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very
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 healthy and sweet as you probably know. We are going to do a physical exercise in the club, I need to have it, because it has a huge benefit for me
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against the other team. I had an experience in my country everyone must have
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 dish and they have done a good job, because of the digestive of the food.
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, you must not eat a lot because it contains
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 of proteins. Just
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 grill without any seasoning and
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. You should remember to let them know about that if not I will not do my best in
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 event. Hopefully, it's ready before we start. I look forward to hearing from you as soon as possible. Kind regards,

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Consider clearly expressing your offer to prepare the dish at the beginning of the letter to enhance clarity.
coherence and cohesion
Try to maintain a logical flow in your ideas by linking paragraphs smoothly and ensuring each has a clear focus.
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Ensure that you provide a complete description of the dish and its benefits to strengthen your reasoning for its inclusion.
coherence and cohesion
The letter has an appropriate greeting and closing, which adds a polite tone to your writing.
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You've included a personal experience that adds authenticity to your suggestion about the dish.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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