The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. C12T1

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The bar chart gives information about how many

people

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of different

gender

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genders

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did physical activity regularly in

Autralian

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Australian

Australia

Overall

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, the total number of

female

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females

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who did

reguarl

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regular

physical activity is than

male

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males

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People

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aged 35 to 44 have the largest proportional disparity between different sex ,but the smallest gap is in the

people

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who

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are

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65 and over. The proportion of females aged 45 to 54 who exercise regularly is larger than any other group of

people

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including

male

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males

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and

female

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females

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while

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there are only 43.1%

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of male

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male

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males

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did body movement at

this

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stage of age.

Furthermore

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, the

percantage

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percentage

of women from 35 to 44 years old is second only to the first and it has the biggest gap with men , up

to13

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to 13

On the other hand

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, young males aged between 15 to 24 account for the largest proportion among all age groups of men. Following

that is

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the men greater than or equal to 65 years old ,which is

second

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the second

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biggest percentage in males. Even so,

felmales

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females

still lead males by 0.4% ,which is the minimal gap among all groups.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

182 words

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The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010. C12T1

In many countries today, if people want to find work, they have to move away from their friends and their families. Do you think the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people's behaviour. What is your opinion?

Some people think that the increasing use of computers and mobile phones in communication has negative effects on young people’s reading and writing skills. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In many large cities, people have to spend hours driving in heavy traffic every day. What are the effects of this on society and the individual? What can be done about it? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.