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The graph compares the percentage of international and the percentage of UK students gaining second class degrees or better at a major UK University in 2009.

The graph compares the percentage of international and the percentage of UK students gaining second class degrees or better at a major UK University in 2009.
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The line chart compares the proportion of international and British
students
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 achieving second-class
degrees
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 or higher in various majors at a major
UK
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 university in 2009.
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, the percentage of
UK
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students
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 obtaining second-class
degrees
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 or better was generally higher compared to international
students
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 across most majors. Specifically, international
students
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 achieved their highest proportion of second-class or better
degrees
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 in Information Technology,
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 their lowest was in International Law. In Nursing, both international and
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students
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 attained nearly identical percentages of around 70%.
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, in Accountancy, both groups had comparable results, but at a slightly lower level of around 60%.
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, it is notable that
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students
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 were most successful in Sociology and Art History, achieving their highest proportions of second-class or higher
degrees
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 compared to other subjects.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students, degrees, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "compares" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "compares" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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