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Band 4.5

Governments should spend money on railways rather than roads. To whet extend do you agree or disagree?

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Authorities should invest in
railroad
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railroads
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 rather than roads. I personally agree with
this
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 statement because
railway
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railways
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 are efficient transportation for people and goods, the
coast
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cost
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 is reasonable and it is saving
time
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.
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 with, trains have been widely known and considered
the
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sufficient transportation for passengers for
couple
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a couple
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 of decades now. In modern days it is still the most convenient transport for an individual to get to their daily destinations,
such
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 as going to work, college, visiting families and even for tourists.
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, in Japan, the majority of the community
they
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take
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takes
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 the subways,
the
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and the
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 ticket prices
is
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are
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considering
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considered
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 lower
comparing
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compared
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 with the car
peices
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pieces
prices
 and the unexpected price in gaz\petrol. Not only that, but in Japan, the trains
also
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carries
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 the goods for business owners.
Morover
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Moreover
, nowadays all
the
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society
live
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lives
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 in a rapid and faster world where everything should be accomplished in
a
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less
amound
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amount
 of
time
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. What I mean by
that is
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,
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time
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that time
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 is
critical
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a critical
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 element in the modern days.
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, the
puplic
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public
 anywhere in the world
need
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needs
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 to reach early and
to
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apply
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avoid
the
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road congestion as
opssible
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possible
. So
instead
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 of getting
in
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on
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 the trafficking road for an hour or two
getting
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and getting
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 late for an important meeting or final exam, it is completely better to manage
time
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 and
using
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 the railways for a couple of minutes.
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, in Qatar, the government dedicated the metro as the only way to transport people during the Qatar World Cup 2022 to avoid unnecessary traffic.
To Conclude
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, I think is it significantly smart to spend money and construct
in
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the
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railroads for the benefit of the crowd for so many reasonable factors.

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language
Make sure to proofread for spelling and grammatical errors, such as 'the coast is reasonable' (should be 'the cost is reasonable') and 'the ticket prices is' (should be 'the ticket prices are').
language
Try to vary your vocabulary and sentence structures to enhance clarity and maintain the reader's interest.
coherence
Provide clearer connections between your ideas and ensure each paragraph has a solid topic sentence that reflects the main point.
coherence
Your conclusion could be stronger; summarizing your key points and restating your position clearly would improve it.
examples
You provided relevant examples, such as the use of trains in Japan and Qatar, which enhance your argument.
structure
Your introduction clearly states your position regarding the topic, making it easy for the reader to understand your viewpoint.
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