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The line graph below shows the number of international tourists who visited three different regions from 2010 to 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the number of international tourists who visited three different regions from 2010 to 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph shows how many international
tourists
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 visited
Asia
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,
Europe
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, and
Africa
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 from 2010 to 2014.
Overall
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, the number of
tourists
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 increased in all three regions.
Europe
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 had the most
tourists
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, and
Africa
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 had the least.
Asia
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also
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 grew steadily during
this
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 period. In 2010, about 60
million
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 people visited
Europe
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.
Asia
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 had around 40
million
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, and
Africa
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 had 20
million
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. In the next two years, all numbers went up.
Europe
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 rose to 70
million
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, and
Asia
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 to 50
million
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.
Africa
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 increased a little to about 25
million
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. From 2012 to 2014, the trend continued.
Europe
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 reached about 80
million
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 visitors.
Asia
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 went up to 60
million
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.
Africa
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also
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 grew slowly and reached 30
million
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 by 2014.
To sum up
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,
Europe
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 stayed the top region for
tourists
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, but
Asia
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 had strong growth too.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, asia, europe, africa, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "went up" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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