Some people argue that to make healthy foods like fruits and vegetables more affordable, they should be subsidised by the government. Others believe that it is better to tax unhealthy foods. Discuss both views and give your option.

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Certain individuals believe that government should
subsidis
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subsidise
subsidies
subsidize
healthy
food
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such
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as fruits and vegetables to make these convenient to buy
while
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others think it is good to impose
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tax
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a tax
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on
unheathy
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unhealthy
bevarage
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beverage
.
Although
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implimenting
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implementing
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tax
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a tax
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on unsafe
food
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will reduce its consumption, I believe that reduce in
price
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the price
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of good
food
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can
increased
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increase
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its availability to poor
people
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. On the one side, if authorities will raise the cost of nutrient
less
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apply
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snackes
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snacks
snakes
,
definitally
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definitely
, it would stop
public
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the public
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from purchasing these.
these
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products will no longer be for regular use
then
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.
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, less use of these will
health
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help
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mankind to keep
themselevs
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themselves
healthy and fit.
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, Canada like
nation
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a nation
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, taking
lot
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a lot
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of
tax
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on
eaten
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apply
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products having excessive sugar value like cold drinks, resulting drop in
markit
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market
.
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, only
limited
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a limited
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quantity of these are bought by buyers.
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, I believe that there
are
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is
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significant
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a significant
the significant
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number of
people
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who are still under
poverty
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the poverty
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line and are not able to buy healthy
food
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. On the other side, relaxation in healthy
food
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cost will help poor
peple
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people
to buy these which will not only help in making
nation
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the nation
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disease free but will
also
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motivates
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motivate
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them to eat
heathy
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healthy
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.
many
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fruits like
apple
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apples
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are not
afforable
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affordable
,
stoping
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stopping
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people
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for
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from
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its consumption.
therefore
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, they have to choose cheaper and unsafe
snackes
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snacks
snakes
. For
exmaple
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example
, a study conducted by Oxford University
reaveled
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revealed
revelled
that
human
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humans
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usually attract
toward
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to
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cheaper
option
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options
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. if
they
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apply
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there is
price
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the price
a price
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difference between products, they would most
probeley
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probably
choose
less
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a less
the less
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expensive product,
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,
it
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apply
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reducting
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reducing
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healthy
food
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can be a good alternative.
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, no
doublt
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doubt
, putting
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tax
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a tax
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can limit
people
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and
also
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benefits
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benefit
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the govenment
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govenment
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government
financially. I believe, subsidising good eating has more merits as more and more
people
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can take
its
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apply
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advantages
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advantage
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.

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coherence and cohesion
Improve the clarity and logical flow of your arguments. Make sure each paragraph has a clear main point and supporting evidence that directly relates to the topic.
language accuracy
Proofread your essay to correct spelling and grammar mistakes. Phrases like 'subsidis', 'bevarage', and 'implimenting' should be corrected to 'subsidize', 'beverage', and 'implementing'.
task achievement
Include more specific and relevant examples to strengthen your argument. For instance, provide statistics or studies that illustrate the impact of subsidizing healthy foods or taxing unhealthy ones.
task achievement
You presented both sides of the argument clearly and provided your opinion, which shows an understanding of the task requirements.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear conclusion that summarizes your opinion, which is important in IELTS writing.
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