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Writing Samples
Band 4

Every year several languages die out. Some people think that this is not important because life will be easier if there are fewer languages in the world. To what exyent do you agree or disagree?

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Many languages
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 extinct every year. The debate
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 has positive or negative effects is still controversial.
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 not support the idea that encourages the decline of languages around the world. The main reason behind
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 disagreement is the fact that
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 communication must be diverse and

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task achievement
Consider providing a clearer thesis statement in your introduction that outlines your main arguments. This helps to set up the structure of your essay more effectively.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use more varied linking words and phrases to improve the flow of your ideas and enhance coherence throughout your paragraphs.
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In your examples, make sure they are specific and relevant to bolster your arguments, as this will strengthen your overall response.
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You have chosen an important and relevant topic that encourages discussion, which is a strong start.
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Your writing demonstrates an understanding of the controversy surrounding language extinction, which is evident in your introduction.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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