The bar chart below shows the expenditure of two countries in consumer goods in 2010.

The bar chart below shows the expenditure of two countries in consumer goods in 2010.
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The bar graph illustrates how
much
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many
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pounds were spent by the two nations on essential consumer items in the year 2010.
Overall
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, cars and books were popular in both countries
while
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more money was spent on cameras by residents of the United Kingdom.
On the other hand
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, in France, people prefer computers over photography devices.
Moreover
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, neither France nor the UK used to buy much
frangrances
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fragrance
fragrances
.
To begin
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with, in 2010, the highest expenditure was
of
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on
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cars in
the
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both nations 450,000 pounds in the UK and 400,000 in another country.
In addition
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,
expenses
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the expenses
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of electronic gadgets were 350,000 by Britishers and less than 4 lakh by French people. To move
further
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,
French
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the French
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spent less amount on paperwork as compared to the United Kingdom citizens which was 3 lakh and much less than forty-five hundred thousand respectively. France reduced expenses by the year 2010 for cameras by 50,000 as it expense on perfume which was 200,000 pounds. During the period of 2010,
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the Britishers
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Britishers
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Britisher's
Britishers'
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economy for purchasing picture-taking gadgets was approximately 360 thousand which was almost 2.5 times of scents in that year.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • consumer goods
  • bar chart
  • comparison
  • categories
  • data points
  • economic status
  • consumer behavior
  • illustrate
  • implications
  • patterns
  • trends
  • notable differences
  • summary
  • reflect
  • insights
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