The tables below show people's reasons for giving up smoking, and when they intend to give up. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The tables below show people's reasons for giving up smoking, and when they intend to give up. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The tables below show people's reasons for giving up smoking, and when they intend to give up. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
A glance at the tables given illustrates the
reasons
Use synonyms
why
people
Use synonyms
giving up the smoking habit and the time when the smoker
intend
Correct subject-verb agreement
intends
show examples
to give up. Based on an
overall
Linking Words
perspective, it can be seen that getting better for
health
Use synonyms
in general attains the first place for the
reasons
Use synonyms
why smokers stop their habit,
while
Linking Words
the present
health
Use synonyms
problems
obtains
Change the verb form
obtain
show examples
the
last
Linking Words
position.
Moreover
Linking Words
,
people
Use synonyms
stop
Correct pronoun usage
who stop
show examples
their smoking habit within a half year
reaches
Correct subject-verb agreement
reach
show examples
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
first place, whilst within a month
gets
Correct subject-verb agreement
get
show examples
the
last
Linking Words
spot. From an initial figure, the foremost
Use synonyms
reasons
Fix the agreement mistake
reason
show examples
for stopping smoking is getting better for
health
Use synonyms
in general
by
Change preposition
apply
show examples
71%, where mostly
people
Use synonyms
who smoked fewer than 10 cigarettes
achieves
Correct subject-verb agreement
achieve
show examples
the highest percentage
by
Change preposition
at
show examples
74%.
Furthermore
Linking Words
, less risk of getting
smoking- related
Correct your spelling
smoking-related
show examples
sickness attains the second position by 25%,
where
Correct word choice
whereas
show examples
moderate cigarettes smoked (10-19 cigarettes) gets the highest
positions
Fix the agreement mistake
position
show examples
by 28%.
Subsequently
Linking Words
, the next
reasons
Use synonyms
are considerations of finance
by
Change preposition
apply
show examples
31%, the pressure from family
by
Change preposition
apply
show examples
16% ,and present
health
Use synonyms
problems
by
Change preposition
apply
show examples
12%,
subsequently
Linking Words
. Fron the next table,
people
Use synonyms
intended to give up smoking within a half year
reaches
Correct subject-verb agreement
reach
show examples
the highest quota
by
Change preposition
of
show examples
35%. The next positions are within a year by 21% and within a month by 12%. The total smokers who intended to give up
gains
Wrong verb form
gained
show examples
highest
Correct article usage
the highest
show examples
quota by 71%.
On the other hand
Linking Words
,
people
Use synonyms
who do not try to give up
obtains
Correct subject-verb agreement
obtain
show examples
the least quota by 29%.

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site's author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last, subsequently".
Vocabulary: Replace the words reasons, people, health with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reaches" was used 2 times.
What to do next:
Look at other essays: