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The table below shows the number of full-time students from India who studied at various universities in the UK in 2020/21 and 2021/22

The table below shows the number of full-time students from India who studied at various universities in the UK in 2020/21 and 2021/22
The data table illustrates
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number
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the number
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 of
indian
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Indian
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students
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 pursuing
full time
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 courses in six different universities in the UK
as well as
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number
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the number
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 of
students
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increase
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 and how
many
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much
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percentage
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it
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apply
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increased
by
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in two academic years (2020/2021 and 2021/2022).
Overall
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, the highest
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 is
in
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the
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Sheffield
University
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,
on the contrary
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, the least
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 is
in
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BPP
University
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. BPP
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university
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 was seen with
most
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number
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 of
students
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 in the first year,
while
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Coventry
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university
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in
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second
 year. The Sheffield
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university
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 shows a significant
increase
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 of 187.7% in
indian
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Indian
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students
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 making the
number
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 2,345.
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,
in
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the
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Coventry
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university
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 there is
an
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 change of 2900 (121.3%) and
in
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 the
University
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 of
leicester
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Leicester
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 is seen
by
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 103.4%
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that
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 is
change
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a change
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 from 1,175 to 2,390 .
Remaining
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 of the universities
shows
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 an
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lesser
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of less
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 than 100%. The
University
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 of Greenwich shows a change of 2,085
indian
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Indian
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students
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that
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is
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 an
increase
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by
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of
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 84.9%.
while
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 the Anglia Ruskin
University
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 and BPP
University
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has
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have
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 an
increase
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 of 69.6% and 46.8% respectively over the two academic years 2020/21 and 2021/22.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "that is, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, students, increase, university with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 8 times.
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