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The maps below shows the town of Lynnfield in 1936 and then later in 2007.

The maps below shows the town of Lynnfield in 1936 and then later in 2007.
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The maps illustrate the changes in the layout of Lynnfield
town
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 between 1936 to 2007.
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, the
town
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 has changed fundamentally, in 1936 there was no place for the residents of the
town
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 to live,
however
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, in 2007, the river area has given place to many houses. The updates in the
town
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 have improved its functionality and accessibility, notably, a new shopping centre, museum, and golf course
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 been added The former cycle path in the southwest of the
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,
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 has been replaced by a straight road. Across the main road in the north of the former cycle path used to feature three trees,
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 spot now houses only one tree. The new residential area in the northeast of the
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 took the place of the river. South of the residential area, there were farmland and government offices situated,
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,
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 has been replaced by more functional facilities
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 as a museum and a golf course. Moving to the centre of the
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, the bank and the library, which are located in the south of the
town
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 have not altered, though the flower shop beside them changed into a travel agent office the post office in front of
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 store remained the same.
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, in front of these
shops
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 used to be sweet
shops
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 and butchers, these two
shops
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 have been converted into a big supermarket. The most important change in the
downtowntown
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downtown town
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 there was vacant space in the middle of the former
shops
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, but
this
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 now features as a shopping centre.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words town, shops with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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