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Band 4.5

The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Some worker tend to their working
hours
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are decreased
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and extend
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holidays
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time
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,
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seems
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 to keep
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 working
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remains
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unchanged. To
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 larger extent, I agree that reducing
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office
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 is a positive trend.
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, there are some factors to be taken into
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consideration before making a decision about the office
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 on your own. The following paragraphs outline the arguments for
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 workplace problem. One of the main arguments
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 favour
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this
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 trend is that it allows workers to have a better work-life balance. They can spend more off-work
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 on personal and social activities and enhance their social circles with both peers and family.
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, they can join different activities with friends,
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 as hiking or playing board games, when they are
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.
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, they have more
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 to accompany
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their parents and children since a majority of adults have claimed their regret
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 they cannot participate in the childhood of their sons and daughters. In short, it is generally agreed that
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shorter working
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 and
extend
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the
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weekends provide
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 better work-life balance for workers.
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, to a small extent, it may not be the better choice, depending on the number of businesses in the company. In fact, some bosses eager
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 their employees to work a long
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, especially working overtime, to create more innovative plans which can attract multiple customers. The creative projects are the most significant selling points to raise the turnover. A report in
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 popular financial magazine revealed that
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employers
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employees
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, who work in the top 50 International Companies, claim that their colleagues often suggest and design some outstanding promotions since they have many conferences in the offices. In
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 case, I tend to believe that
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longer working
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 a better phenomenon in the workplace only if workers choose
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international companies.
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 it seems to be true that
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shorter office
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 to be a popular option among adults on the grounds that it is not that the work-life balance, the seriousness of the revenue of the companies should not overlooked. To fully maximize the potential of
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 trend, all adults have to do is concentrate
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 their jobs
during
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 in the working.

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language
Ensure to proofread your writing for grammatical errors and typos.
structure
Strengthen your conclusion by summarizing the main arguments more clearly.
content
Provide more specific examples to support your points.
content
You present a clear opinion on the topic, showing your stance well.
structure
Your essay addresses both sides of the argument, which adds depth to your discussion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • productivity
  • burnout
  • motivation
  • mental well-being
  • work-life balance
  • job satisfaction
  • pollution levels
  • traffic congestion
  • consumer spending
  • economic implications
  • leisure and service sectors
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