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The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar charts and line graph below show the results of a survey conducted over a three-year period to discover what people who live in London think of the city. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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 bar chart illustrates the
results
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 in
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percentage
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a percentage
the percentage
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 of a survey conducted
between
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over
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three
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a
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years
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three-year
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 period to know what the people who live in
london
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London
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 think of the city.
over
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all, the range of shops received the most
results
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 at 45% in
year
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 1 but decreased slightly the second
year
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 but
rised
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raised
rose
rise
 back up in the third
year
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.
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 with, as the range of jobs got the highest
results
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, following up is job opportunities by approximately 38% in
year
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 1
while
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year
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years
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 2 and 3
was
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 on the same level of 35%. With
mixture
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a mixture
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 of people, there's no significant difference
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year
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 1 and 2 went slightly above 35% and
year
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 3 remained
domant
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dormant
dominant
on
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at
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 35%.
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,
museum
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the number
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 %
art
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of art
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 galleries increased progressively
0ver
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over
three
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a
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years
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three-year
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 period 22%,24% and 26% respectively. Nightlife and transport
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are
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 the opposite of each other.
year
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 1 started at 25% and decreased to 20%
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 went
upslightly
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slightly
up slightly
 above 20% that of
night life
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nightlife
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 and transport is the opposite of nightlife.
Year
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 1,2 and 3
results
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entails
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indicate
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 that the
percentage
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 started higher
percentage
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 at
year
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 1 but at
year
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 3 the
percentage
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 decreased
overall
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words results, percentage, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • line graph
  • percentage
  • survey
  • favorable opinion
  • neutral opinion
  • unfavorable opinion
  • trend
  • public sentiment
  • perception
  • peaks and dips
  • increase
  • decline
  • indifferent
  • gradual decrease
  • sentiment analysis
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