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Band 3.5

Increasing the price of fuel is the best way to solve the growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective?

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The enhancement of fuel prices is seen as the best solution to reduce the congestion
in
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 the road and
pollution
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 issues. The writer agrees that
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 solution can solve these problems, but there are still many alternative
ways
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.
This
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the
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 benefit of increasing the
price
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for
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 gas
station
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 and other substitution
ways
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,
for
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instance
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enhance
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 the usage of public
transportation
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. First and foremost, people will reconsider
to use
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using
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 their own
cars
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 or motorcycles if there is an enhancement in
fuel's
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fuel
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price
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prices
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. They will not waste their money only on
transportation
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 because there are other expenses to be fulfilled,
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 as rent, groceries, etc. If the fuel expense is more than their living budget, they will not use their
cars
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.
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, the
cars
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 and
pollution
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 in the
street
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 will
be
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decrease. People will find
ways
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 to overcome
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 problem . One of the alternative
ways
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 is using
the
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public
transportation
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,
for
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example
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 buses,
train
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trains
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, etc.
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 the
price
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 is cheaper than using their own
cars
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, they
also
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 can rest when they are on the way to
destination
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their destination
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.
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 situation
also
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 can reduce the traffic and the
pollution
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 in the street. From many private
cars
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 to only
few
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 buses, will surely reduce
the
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pollution
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.
To sum up
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, the regulation to
increasing
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increase
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 the
price
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 is one of the
solution
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 to overcome the problems, but it will be more effective if government can regulate the citizens to use public
transportation
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.

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Task Achievement
Try to make your introduction more specific by stating the reasons you believe increasing fuel prices can help reduce traffic and pollution. This sets a clearer path for your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure that your conclusion summarizes the key points you made in your essay, rather than just restating one idea. This will give a stronger final impression.
Coherence and Cohesion
Work on linking your ideas more smoothly with appropriate transitional phrases to enhance the flow. This will improve the overall coherence of your essay.
Task Achievement
You have identified alternative solutions alongside the main argument, which shows an understanding that there are multiple ways to address the issue.
Coherence and Cohesion
The structure of your essay is clear, with distinct paragraphs discussing different ideas.

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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