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improvements in health, education and trade are essential for the development of poorer nations. Hoewer, the goverments of richer nations should take more responsiblity for helping the poorer nations in such areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion

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Enhancement of education,
health
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 and trade
of
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in
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region
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 is crucial for their development and worldwide image. These sectors determine the progress of
countries
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. Preference of
countries
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, regions and continents depends on good relationships between their subcategories. Based on
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 idea, I totally agree that affluent community should share their experiences with other society.
Firstly
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, a
health
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 issue is considered global. We know that the world experienced
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 a global pandemic as Covid 19, first days seemed like a simple problem for local people.
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, it became a horrible
health
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 issue for all
nations
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. Depending on
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 thesis,
nations
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 should give a hand to other
countries
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 to solve
health
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 problems. Rich
countries
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 should support poorer
countries
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 in these areas, involving volunteers and contributing financial assistance.
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, education is the main key
for
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the improvment
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improvment
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improvement
 of
nations
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all
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in all
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 aspects. It is
essentias
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essential
communities
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that communities
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 should assist poorer
nations
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 in
this
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 sector. Rich
nations
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 have to
sponsorship weakness
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 ones, build schools,
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and collages
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collages
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colleges
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,
support
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and support
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 them with
fiancil recources
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financial resources
 and teachers.
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, Wealthy regions should help poorer lands
to
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apply
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discover their
recourses
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resources
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 and potential
in
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for
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 trade. Estimate
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the
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capacity of local people and involve them
to
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in
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 these
achivments
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achievements
. In
conclude
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, prosperous states should
asist
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assist
weakness
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countries
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 in all aspects, not only for those
countries
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, at the time for
all
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apply
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the world.

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general
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ideas
Enhance the development of your examples to provide clearer insights on how wealthier nations can assist poorer nations.
coherence
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content
The essay demonstrates a clear understanding of the topic and presents a personal opinion.
coherence
The structure of your response is clear, with distinct paragraphs for different points.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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