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The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010

The chart below shows the expenditure of two countries on consumer goods in 2010
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The bar graph gives information about the comparison of the
UK
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 and
France
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 on consumer goods in 2010. Units are measured in
pounds
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 sterling.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the
UK
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 spent more money on consumer goods than
France
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 in the period given. Both the British and The French spent most of their money on cars,
while
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 the least amount of money was spent on perfume. In terms of cars, the
UK
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 spent more money-approximately 450000
pounds
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 sterling than
France
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 respectively £ 400000.
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, books were sold more in the
UK
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 than in
France
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 ( about £400000 and exactly £300000). The British significantly bought more cameras than the French (approximately £ 350000 and 150000 respectively). In
France
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, people preferred to buy more computers than the British( about £375000 and exactly £ 350000).
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, the rate of perfume was 200000
pounds
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 sterling in
France
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,
while
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 it was sold around 140000
pounds
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 sterling in the
UK
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words uk, france, pounds with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • expenditure
  • consumer goods
  • chart
  • countries
  • overall
  • compare
  • analyze
  • categories
  • consumer spending
  • trends
  • proportions
  • statistics
  • increase
  • decrease
  • significant
  • notable
  • remarkable
  • substantial
  • considerable
  • determine
  • conclude
  • in conclusion
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