You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, give details of your study plan explain why you want to get a part time job suggest how your friend could help you find a job

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Dear Tricia, Hope you are doing well,

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your family! I have

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admitted to Coast

mountain college

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Mountain College

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, Terrace in Business and Administration diploma for two years. To support my

tution

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tuition

fees and get a work

experinece

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experience

, I want you to help me to get a

part time

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job. My classes will start

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the 7th

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of Spetember

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Spetember

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September

and I will land in Terrace on

2nd

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september

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Accomodation

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been already booked with the college and I will be staying there for

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two years. They are

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providing the

first time pick up

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facility from the airport for

the

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international students. As you know,

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graduation

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in finance and want to start a business in my home country after getting the most

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course and the international work experience. As you have been in British Columbia

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years, and your social network is very strong. I want you to assist me in getting a part-time job to support my studies and

tution

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tuition

fees. I will be very

greatful

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grateful

to you for your help and emailed you my resume as well. Looking forward to hearing from you soon. Take care and stay fine. Yours

Truely

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Truly

Ashima

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coherence and cohesion

Consider checking for spelling mistakes and grammatical errors to enhance clarity.

task achievement

Try to include more specific examples of job types you are looking for.

suitable writing tone

The letter has a friendly tone, which is appropriate for a letter to a friend.

complete response

You clearly stated your study plan and aspirations.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

7 paragraphs

197 words

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