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Some children found some subject eg mathematics and philosophy,… difficult so these subjects should be optional instead of compulsory. To what extent, do you agree or disagree?

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Maths and philosophy are quite hard as compared to some
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 and they must be compulsory in
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opinion
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 as they open up the brains of the pupils. Moreso, these
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 every student as they are
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necessary
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 living. These
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 increase the reasoning capacity of every child who may be
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studying
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 l do not encourage these
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 to be optional because no one will choose one of them.
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, mathematics and philosophy must be optional because they may not benefit every child as some of them prefer to study law or arts and
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These
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 compulsory
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 pupils as they may reduce some grades of the students so
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 must be optional. To a greater
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 these
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compulsory
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 tough and sometimes they may be
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necessary
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, to a lesser
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subjects
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 must be compulsory as they are the
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 of learning.

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You have a clear opinion on the topic and express it in your essay, which is a good starting point.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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