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Band 3

There is too much noise in many public places in cities. What are the causes of this problem? What can be done to solve the problem?

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Globalization is increasing fast
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; there are some areas in the
cities
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we
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 can observe plenty of
noise
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 pollution. There are several reasons
of
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 raising
the
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apply
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noise
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 pollution and we can address
this
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 problem by adopting some measurable steps that will help to control of issue.
This
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discussed
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 all the problems and provide feasible solutions
of
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 the same. One major cause of
noise
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 in public areas is traffic. In busy
cities
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, there are often too many cars, buses, and motorcycles, all creating loud sounds. These vehicles, especially
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during
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 rush hours, produce constant honking, engine
noise
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, and the sound of
tires
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 on the road. Another reason is construction work. In many
cities
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, buildings are being built or repaired, and construction sites produce a lot of
noise
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 from machines, drilling, and hammering.
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, overcrowding is a significant cause of
noise
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. In
cities
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 with large populations, more people gather in public spaces, and their conversations, laughter, and even shouting can add to the
noise
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 level.

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Task Response
The introduction includes the topic but could be clearer and more concise in stating the main points. Consider summarizing the two main causes and solutions more directly.
Task Response
The points made in the main body paragraphs are relevant but could benefit from more specific examples or data to strengthen the arguments.
Coherence and Cohesion
To improve coherence, ensure each paragraph contains a clear topic sentence that relates back to the thesis. Transitions between ideas could also be enhanced for smoother reading.
Coherence and Cohesion
Be sure to include a clear conclusion that summarizes the main points and reiterates the solutions proposed.
Task Response
The essay successfully identifies key causes of noise pollution, such as traffic and construction work, which are relevant and relatable topics.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • noise pollution
  • urbanization
  • population density
  • traffic congestion
  • infrastructure development
  • public announcement systems
  • street performances
  • noise regulations
  • soundproof materials
  • public transportation
  • designated quiet zones
  • green spaces
  • buffer zones
  • public awareness
  • community efforts
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